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I wish to start that I may need to be a more universal critic, but it won't mean negative outlook so much. First of all the atmosphere of floating on wreckage was well-created. The language used was very appropriate, and the lines on a mind filled with sea urchins was amusing. I will add that although I realize that a castaway's thoughts may be so short, like the breath, I still prefer more detail to enhance the atmosphere. That is the brunt of any negativity. A long narrative like Rime of the Ancient Mariner is due.Otherwise it was good work?
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silver-ships-fly Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
thank you!

Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Jan 17, 2013  Professional Writer
Quite welcome.
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