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:iconmichel-le-fou:
First of all, I am thrilled to read your work again. Now, as to content, stylistics and so on. This is one of many poems that compensates brevity with emotional and descriptive values. Short and direct, as I analyzed another poem. In this case too, I see nothing wrong. The height of emotion in the words is outstanding and the analogy is good. A maelstrom of confused emotions rages onward, momentary bliss is nave, and a storm is breaking. Exciting usage, albeit a bit too often used. Not your fault. Popular dictum. And to conclude the blood in his ears is a comparison to the ocean.
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you! You're very kind. I really appreciate this. Critiques really help me grow as a writer, and you give good critiques! Thank you again.
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2013  Professional Writer
They should support rather than destroy the writer.
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Vegetabelle Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
I totally agree.
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