First of all, I am thrilled to read your work again. Now, as to content, stylistics and so on. This is one of many poems that compensates brevity with emotional and descriptive values. Short and direct, as I analyzed another poem. In this case too, I see nothing wrong. The height of emotion in the words is outstanding and the analogy is good. A maelstrom of confused emotions rages onward, momentary bliss is nave, and a storm is breaking. Exciting usage, albeit a bit too often used. Not your fault. Popular dictum. And to conclude the blood in his ears is a comparison to the ocean.