FingersmithMoonlight, glittering and cold, dull and pale,
There is emphatically and audibly a song rhythm here. I should like to extend a few more verses, u can do so at leisure. The rhyme pattern is very suitable for song lyrics, and I reminisce about those I submitted. We seem to share a tacit understanding of this art.i am now trying to imagine the genre of music to fit it, but certainly you know. The word/ language you chose is very appropriate too.i find little wrong with it other than "should be longer". That is purely my feeling. You may be contemplating an album? If yes, I look forward to more lyrics.
Thank you very much! As far as genre goes, it'd probably be in the style of Heather Dale or Emilie Autumn (not sure what genre they do, but I listened to them a lot when writing this). I would love to do more on this (hell, I might extend it into a ballad), and I haven't thought of doing an album, but that sounds like a lot of fun.