Breathtaking at least. The choice of words and line lengths is original, to start. I enjoyed these. I always find pleasure with writers/poets with similar inclinations to mine. The total arrangement was very charming and a worthy read. Regarding length, I noticed that your stanza formation reflected your attention(?) and desire, which is always the inclination of a poet. You mentioned "silence" in the first line, so I wondered that it may determine the length and subject of this piece. The first fur lines were very charming as a beginning. The description of hearts and pulses was exciting. As to the remainder, it was nothing short of exciting. Well-done!
The choice of words and line lengths is original, to start. I enjoyed these. I always find pleasure with writers/poets with similar inclinations to mine. The total arrangement was very charming and a worthy read. Regarding length, I noticed that your stanza formation reflected your attention(?) and desire, which is always the inclination of a poet. You mentioned "silence" in the first line, so I wondered that it may determine the length and subject of this piece. The first fur lines were very charming as a beginning. The description of hearts and pulses was exciting. As to the remainder, it was nothing short of exciting. Well-done!