This is my first authorized critique since joiniing the group.
First of all, the choice of words through the first two stanzas was eye-catching. "I long to inflame your appetite with a monsoon of caresses..." is very unusual expression for modern poetry and even I think of writing such style. Good work for thinking of it first. Second, the line length and rhythm are very well-conceived. You show good awareness of both. I believe I have collected from you before. You promise good reading so far as I remember, and this entry is no exception. I enjoyed it from first line to last.