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Winterland
"Winter Only World" Contest
Sci-fi

On a planet more remote than X,
Almost unseen by our telescopes,
Where no manned raft would ever go,
Thereat no complex organism would survive
Upon a surface of frozen ice and snow_
Ice in columns and myriad shapes,
Snow in glaciers as on Earth
And air colder than an Earth winter wind.
Remoter from our Sun and all its warmth
Dark and still as  surrounding space
Any man who sets his feet
Would freeze instantly and there remain
For Winter Only World Contest @#PoeticCondition.
A remote planet, colder than X and uininhabitable.
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Slug22 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012
I can see it just as you describe, just before my eyes freeze over. :D nice work!
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gytalf2000 Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012
I'm getting cold just lookin' at this poem...
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IchiHitsuFangirl Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I really adore the past two lines. I don't know, there's just an air of finality around it....

Now that I think about it, approaching it this was makes waaaaay more sense than whatever the hell I did.
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Take the example and rewrite. Best way.
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RiseandBe Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Absolutely chilling. I like the very literal take on the theme. Good luck!
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Thanks!
Reward: Join #literatureforall
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Everlasting90 Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Give me the shivers, why don't ya?
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Michel-le-fou Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Brrrrrrrr!
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