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Little Remains
For Puabi
Little remains but leisure
Time for a couple's sweetest pleasure
We treat each other's heart as a treasure
Lying back to gaze at each other
Seeing the love that never dies
In each other's eyes
The eye is path to the lover's heart
Breathing deeply to vow
Love deeply now and forever
And part our ways never
For Puabi
Little remains but leisure
Time for a couple's sweetest pleasure
We treat each other's heart as a treasure
Lying back to gaze at each other
Seeing the love that never dies
In each other's eyes
The eye is path to the lover's heart
Breathing deeply to vow
Love deeply now and forever
And part our ways never
What comes of my leisure..hours of delight beside Puabi.
2nd edition.
2nd edition.
© 2014 - 2024 Michel-le-fou
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Hey there,
Prettyflour here on behalf of 
with the critique you requested.
We’ve got some serious romance going here here 
!
This is short and sweet- quite literally! The brevity works well- you get your point across nicely in just a few words, and I swear the love just OOZES out of this piece. Your simple word choices create sweet emotion and lovely imagery.
Great work. Thank you for sharing your words!