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Hello. First I want to say that writing from the perspective of victim or main characters is always effective, and here I found that the viewpoint is from werewolves. Thrilling concept. I think I had tried it too but I can't remember the submission. The depth of experience here adds to the chill. I feel that you aim at. Oth expressing this in realistic style and in thrilling your reader. As you thrilled and impressed me, I am sure you will succeed. A longer exposition into two or three pages may follow if you're up to that and will match Stevenon at Mister Hyde..bravo!!
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At 8 pm that Halloween evening the neighborhood children aged between 10 and 13 years headed around for the usual tricks and treats. They paused at each doorstep in various costumes. Girls were witches and boys were ghosts, ghouls and goblins. The homeowner or his wife received them with smiles and poured sweets onto each kid's bag; then they headed to the next doorstep.

After one hour, some younger children felt tired or nervous and went home. The older ones kept moving on. Eventually they moved to the far corner of one road, which, at 9:45 pm, began to
look darker and very foreboding to them. Still, they trudged on. When they reached its doorstep and rang the bell, a shadowy figure about 6 feet tall answered the door.

"Tricks or treats!"
"I'll give you all a fine treat if you'll do one trick for me."
"Okay."

He handed one boy a piece of paper with some words scrawled on it. The boy concealed it.

"Read it carefully. When you finish, come for the treat. I promise it to you. "
"Yes, sir."
"You're all very lovely. Mom made the costumes, right?"
"Yes, sir."

They headed back and the boy with the note led them to a lamp to read it. It told them to go to an address and threaten the homeowner with death or plague spells. Although they were scared, they agreed to obey. They headed to the house and the girls rang the bell, and then the owner's wife came to the door. She asked what they wanted.
"Ma'am we want to meet your husband. We have to talk with him."
"Wait there."

He finally came and they read a spell scrawled on the paper. At that moment, the buzzes of what could have been crickets or cicadas twice as large as natural resounded*. The girls gazed at him and said "say sorry or die."
"Say to whom?"
They mentioned the contact. He laughed and replied that the other was mad. Then suddenly he felt a stroke and collapsed. He lay as though dead and his wife screamed fearfully. The children were shocked too.


*Azif {Al-Azif}
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Reminiscing "Tricks or Treats" an early submission, a band of kids goes tricks or treats on Halloween but the older kids have to curse a homeowner for revenge from another, who is merely a shadow. The curse is from Al Azif, or Necronomicon. The victim dies and both the kids and his wife are frightened.

Sources: Lovecraft and Stephen King.
For the 4th week October prompt at Horror-Writers-Unite.
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Michael Rubin
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I have been writing since secondary school where I began to receive recognition for my fiction as class assignments. In university I was a section editor for the school newspaper and continued writing stories and poetry as well as news articles and editorials. I received several awards. I received my Bachelor of Arts in English Literature from a good university and went abroad, to teach ESL to support my interests, [Writers never earn enough by writing!] I earned good pay and recognition for my skill in teaching too. Recently, I edited and wrote several dissertations. The students I wrote for passed viva voce and got degrees.
My principle genres of fiction are horror and science fiction. Conditions do not warrant me to write long stories like before, but I can manage 10 pages.

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